Wednesday, July 7, 2010

चूड़ियां

 

बाज़ार में कल हरी चूड़ियां देख 
कैसी चमक उठीं थीं मेरी 'आँखें'

किसी ने खो दीं थीं ,बनाते वक़्त 

~Saumya
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42 comments:

  1. SaumyaJuly 7, 2010 at 6:24 AM

    PS:This is for all the bangle-makers who often end up loosing their eyesight.

    PS:The last line means they loose their eyesight while crafting the bangles.

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  2. Vandana SinghJuly 7, 2010 at 7:57 AM

    thanks somyaa to clarify tht line ....bahut sunder or marmik triveni hai ..bandhai :)

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  3. DiveshJuly 7, 2010 at 8:01 AM

    brilliant.. your trivenis are getting better.

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  4. संगीता स्वरुप ( गीत )July 7, 2010 at 8:26 AM

    मर्मस्पर्शी.....संवेदनशील पंक्तियाँ

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  5. Avinash ChandraJuly 7, 2010 at 10:42 AM

    bahut khubsurat..sheer excellence.

    I read all 29 posts today..it will not be correct to say anything else but...keep it up :)
    U are simply very good

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  6. Sabi SunshineJuly 7, 2010 at 7:23 PM

    Dear saumya,

    I apologizing for loss of your comments on my blog. I changed my Url id and lost all of the comments. I am so sorry form bottom of my heart. Please accept my apology.

    Love
    Sunshine

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  7. SaumyaJuly 7, 2010 at 7:24 PM

    @vandana: thanks a lot! :)

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  8. SaumyaJuly 7, 2010 at 7:25 PM

    @Divesh: thank you so much!

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  9. SaumyaJuly 7, 2010 at 7:26 PM

    @Sangeeta ji: thank you ma'am!

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  10. SaumyaJuly 7, 2010 at 7:28 PM

    @Avinash ji:I'm glad and surprised too that you read all 29 posts at one go!...thank you soo much for your encouraging words...keep reading!

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  11. Avinash ChandraJuly 7, 2010 at 10:05 PM

    They are worth reading and have a charisma to motivate. 29 is not a very big number, right? So, can be read at a go. :)
    Well done!

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  12. वीरेंद्र सिंहJuly 8, 2010 at 5:38 AM

    Very touching.....

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  13. AnonymousJuly 8, 2010 at 6:27 AM

    very touching and nice lines....

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  14. Pankaj Upadhyay (पंकज उपाध्याय)July 8, 2010 at 8:48 AM

    Well well well.. beautiful triveni.. even if you wouldn't have clarified it.. readers could have related it with the bangle makers.. beautiful yaar..

    and someday even I would dare to do what Avinash did :P.. cool haan.. 29 posts in a day ;)

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  15. VIVEK VK JAINJuly 8, 2010 at 8:18 PM

    b'ful lines....very touching.

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  16. Ramesh SoodJuly 9, 2010 at 12:17 AM

    Bahut sakhat hain yeh shabd..

    Hamari aankhon kii chamak ke liye
    Kissii ne apni aankhon kii chamak khoii hai..
    Khush hain kii kuchh pal ke liye hii sahi
    Hamari aankhen uun ankohon ke liye roii hain..

    Sorry Saumya, lines could not hold themselves.. just spilt form my heart..

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  17. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:43 AM

    @Avinash ji: yep....thanks again :)

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  18. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:44 AM

    @Virendra ji : thanks!

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  19. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:44 AM

    @Shekhar: thanks!

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  20. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:46 AM

    @Pankaj Upadhyay : thank you so much...you're most welcome to read all 29 :D

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  21. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:46 AM

    @Vivek: thanks ya!

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  22. SaumyaJuly 9, 2010 at 5:47 AM

    @Ramesh Sood Sir: wow...your words are always beautiful...thanks!

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  23. अरुणेश मिश्रJuly 9, 2010 at 9:08 AM

    सौम्या ! एक प्रतिभा सम्पन्न कवयित्री ।
    मानवता की पक्षधर । काव्य मे शिल्प का उत्कर्ष ।

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  24. commited to lifeJuly 10, 2010 at 6:47 AM

    beautiful.. heart toching..

    i hav always loved bangles.. but sadly never thought of consequences

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  25. SaumyaJuly 10, 2010 at 8:15 AM

    @Arunesh sir: thank you so much sir...though I'm just a drop in the ocean but it actually feels great to be appreciated by honest criticism .

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  26. SaumyaJuly 10, 2010 at 8:19 AM

    @Deepshikha: thanks ya...we all love bangles....and ironically we cannot do away with ironies !

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  27. MangoManJuly 13, 2010 at 3:39 PM

    God, I'm falling in love with this blog dheere dheere!

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  28. AnandJuly 14, 2010 at 4:57 AM

    Do not write such trivenis. Now, whenever I will see bangles, automatically your lines will come in my mind and .....
    Lines are excellent but too sad for me.

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  29. DimpleJuly 14, 2010 at 9:08 PM

    Hello Saumya,

    Nice and wonderful...
    Sadness and pain is imbibed in these lines. Very touchy!

    Regards,
    Dimple

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  30. SaumyaJuly 15, 2010 at 4:57 AM

    @mangoman: thanku thanku..:)

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  31. SaumyaJuly 15, 2010 at 4:59 AM

    @Anand: I'm really sorry... I just wanted to reflect their pain...we really cannot do away with this but atleast we can be compassionate towards them...they even don't know somebody writes about them :(

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  32. SaumyaJuly 15, 2010 at 5:00 AM

    @Dimps: thanks!

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  33. Ambuj PandeyJuly 15, 2010 at 10:45 AM

    Good one... again.

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  34. बेईमान शायरJuly 15, 2010 at 11:41 AM

    wonderful! pichhli baar itni badhiya triveni kab padhi thi yaad nahi...

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  35. SaumyaJuly 16, 2010 at 4:09 AM

    @ambuj:thanks ya!

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  36. SaumyaJuly 16, 2010 at 4:09 AM

    @maverick: so nice of you..thanks :)

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  37. AnonymousJuly 17, 2010 at 9:48 AM

    बहुत बढिया!

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  38. संजय भास्‍कर July 18, 2010 at 10:09 PM

    Hello Saumya,

    Nice and wonderful...
    sorry for late visit ur blog...

    regards
    sanjay bhaskar

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  39. संजय भास्‍कर July 18, 2010 at 10:10 PM

    बहुत खूब .जाने क्या क्या कह डाला इन चंद पंक्तियों में

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  40. SaumyaJuly 20, 2010 at 4:50 AM

    thankyou samjay ji!

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  41. ShivamkssJuly 29, 2010 at 8:49 AM

    dekhne ko to hai bas 3 panktiyon ki kahani, lekni keh gayi 1 zindagi ki kahani....
    nice one:P keep it up!!!!!!!!

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  42. SaumyaAugust 2, 2010 at 8:38 AM

    thanks shivam!

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