Wednesday, July 7, 2010

चूड़ियां

 

बाज़ार में कल हरी चूड़ियां देख 
कैसी चमक उठीं थीं मेरी 'आँखें'

किसी ने खो दीं थीं ,बनाते वक़्त 

~Saumya

42 comments:

  1. PS:This is for all the bangle-makers who often end up loosing their eyesight.

    PS:The last line means they loose their eyesight while crafting the bangles.

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  2. thanks somyaa to clarify tht line ....bahut sunder or marmik triveni hai ..bandhai :)

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  3. brilliant.. your trivenis are getting better.

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  4. मर्मस्पर्शी.....संवेदनशील पंक्तियाँ

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  5. bahut khubsurat..sheer excellence.

    I read all 29 posts today..it will not be correct to say anything else but...keep it up :)
    U are simply very good

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  6. Dear saumya,

    I apologizing for loss of your comments on my blog. I changed my Url id and lost all of the comments. I am so sorry form bottom of my heart. Please accept my apology.

    Love
    Sunshine

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  7. @Divesh: thank you so much!

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  8. @Sangeeta ji: thank you ma'am!

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  9. @Avinash ji:I'm glad and surprised too that you read all 29 posts at one go!...thank you soo much for your encouraging words...keep reading!

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  10. They are worth reading and have a charisma to motivate. 29 is not a very big number, right? So, can be read at a go. :)
    Well done!

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  11. very touching and nice lines....

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  12. Well well well.. beautiful triveni.. even if you wouldn't have clarified it.. readers could have related it with the bangle makers.. beautiful yaar..

    and someday even I would dare to do what Avinash did :P.. cool haan.. 29 posts in a day ;)

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  13. Bahut sakhat hain yeh shabd..

    Hamari aankhon kii chamak ke liye
    Kissii ne apni aankhon kii chamak khoii hai..
    Khush hain kii kuchh pal ke liye hii sahi
    Hamari aankhen uun ankohon ke liye roii hain..

    Sorry Saumya, lines could not hold themselves.. just spilt form my heart..

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  14. @Avinash ji: yep....thanks again :)

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  15. @Pankaj Upadhyay : thank you so much...you're most welcome to read all 29 :D

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  16. @Ramesh Sood Sir: wow...your words are always beautiful...thanks!

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  17. सौम्या ! एक प्रतिभा सम्पन्न कवयित्री ।
    मानवता की पक्षधर । काव्य मे शिल्प का उत्कर्ष ।

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  18. beautiful.. heart toching..

    i hav always loved bangles.. but sadly never thought of consequences

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  19. @Arunesh sir: thank you so much sir...though I'm just a drop in the ocean but it actually feels great to be appreciated by honest criticism .

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  20. @Deepshikha: thanks ya...we all love bangles....and ironically we cannot do away with ironies !

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  21. God, I'm falling in love with this blog dheere dheere!

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  22. Do not write such trivenis. Now, whenever I will see bangles, automatically your lines will come in my mind and .....
    Lines are excellent but too sad for me.

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  23. Hello Saumya,

    Nice and wonderful...
    Sadness and pain is imbibed in these lines. Very touchy!

    Regards,
    Dimple

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  24. @mangoman: thanku thanku..:)

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  25. @Anand: I'm really sorry... I just wanted to reflect their pain...we really cannot do away with this but atleast we can be compassionate towards them...they even don't know somebody writes about them :(

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  26. wonderful! pichhli baar itni badhiya triveni kab padhi thi yaad nahi...

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  27. @maverick: so nice of you..thanks :)

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  28. Hello Saumya,

    Nice and wonderful...
    sorry for late visit ur blog...

    regards
    sanjay bhaskar

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  29. बहुत खूब .जाने क्या क्या कह डाला इन चंद पंक्तियों में

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  30. dekhne ko to hai bas 3 panktiyon ki kahani, lekni keh gayi 1 zindagi ki kahani....
    nice one:P keep it up!!!!!!!!

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