Friday, July 2, 2010

'जात'


  











बाँध कर रखो ,मासूम मन को ,
और जला कर ख़ाक कर दो पतंगों के ढेर .

हवाएं भी अब रस्ता,'जात' पूछकर देती हैं.

                                                                                                        
~Saumya

27 comments:

  1. Hawayen hii hain jo udaa ley jayengi
    Tang dil logon kii tang baaton ko
    Udane do patangon ko, koi baat nahin
    Sab milengee iik din bhool kar Jaaton ko...

    As I said you inspire Saumya.. very well written thought..

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  2. कुछ अलग सी सोच...जाति पर अच्छा प्रहार

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  3. Oh, so true. Love the power and skill with which you write, and the strong messages you always convey. Keep up the good work!

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  4. जी बहुत बढ़िया......

    पंक्ति केवल तीन

    और इतने में भी

    बजा दी जात-पात की बीन.....

    कुंवर जी,

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  5. Padkar accha lagaa. Caste-ism should have been ended much before 2010. Now people are coming ahead . Its a good sign.
    By the way post was meaningful.

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  6. @Divesh :coz caste discrimination is so much into our thoughts,our deeds,our actions that people resort to 'honourably' kill their sons and daughters....this piece is expressing my agony for the same.

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  7. @Ramesh Sood Sir:well written optimistic thought sir...yeah we can HOPE...thanks!

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  8. @Aayushi: thank you so much...stay happy :)

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  9. @Virendra ji: thank you so much!

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  10. बहुत सुन्दर त्रिवेणी... तीसरी लाईन मे जातिवाद पर अच्छा प्रहार..

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  11. सौम्या !
    यह रचना नही अपितु वर्त्तमान को चित्रित करती सूक्ति है ।
    प्रशंसनीय ।

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  12. Totally in sync with what I think! Awesome metre!

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  13. Hello Saumya,

    A thought with a depth! :)
    Nice work done...!

    Regards,
    Dimple

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  14. @phoenix: thank you for the read :)

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  15. as always...superb n thought provoking!

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  16. @maverick: thank you so much...it really feels good to be appreciated honestly :)

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  17. bahut khoobsurt
    mahnat safal hui
    yu hi likhate raho tumhe padhana acha lagata hai.

    or haan deri ke liye sorry.

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